Allow me to help you. The first issue I see is that the opening two sentences of this article create a false connection. The rave happened the night of the 25th. There were definitely some surprised surfers that morning but no police were called. I know because I was present from start to bitter end. Police may have been called to the beach on the morning of May 27th but they wouldn't have found a rave. Any police response was for a different group of people on a different day.
This is an important distinction.
The facts regarding the “cave rave” are:
No police responded to the event.
The area was left very clean.
The graffiti picture you use in your article is from a different location and time.
No one camped there. Everyone left the area in the morning.
No one made a fire pit.
No one I saw had glass. People were told to bring cans.
Public urination…well yeah…you got to pee somewhere.
Mr. Olson, I see you have written a few other “Neighborhood News” articles for this website. From reading them I gather that you are a surfer who lives in the area. I understand why you would be territorial and I understand why you would write an article that paints the local surfers as mistreated heroes fending off a drunken hoard. But you are never going to graduate to writing real news unless you get your facts straight. This shouldn’t be a sounding board for things that piss you off.
The cave rave was one incident that happened at Sunset Cliffs that weekend. It sounds like there were many others. I understand if the rave needs to be part of your story but your headline should read:
Sunset Cliffs Attracts Memorial Weekend Parties
Causes local wannabe journalist to write terrible article
— May 29, 2013 12:19 a.m.